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We've paved our relationship with molten brick;
then tied our fingers against thunderstruck trees
while prudent street dogs spat selfish lyrics
and served lightly-salted soliloquies.

I cried starshine into your emerald arms,
so you could become the meaningful whisper I'll never hear.
I fell for faithless, plastic charms
in rooms that smelled like smoke, white oak and beer.

Our hearts became rocket ships tied to ribbons,
one crawling on an overstuffed belly; always too far behind
like the sons and daughters of Elias Fitzgibbons
who said we would wed us on Tuesday, that holy bind.

Wicked felt-tipped pens, forging "I love yous."
were like deadswept petals of blueish hues.
:iconseussical-love:
Written 8/9/09 as a collaboration with the infamous *IrrevocableFate, who is a complete total joymaker in all ways. <3

So if you fave/comment this one, please visit her and fave/comment hers when she puts it up. (:

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~PassionsInsanity Jun 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Ivejustmetyouandialreadyknowiloveyou.yourockmysocks,yourefrigginawesome.thankyou.

Consider me blessed to stumbled upon people that know ways withs words like you. Consider me a fan. Definitely.

:heart:
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~cjheery Mar 19, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nothing cliche about this one. Beautifully done.
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:iconyashaswi:
That was beautiful!
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~sound-dispute Mar 13, 2010  Student Writer
i love the way the rhyming goes in this :D excellent!
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~Reanimated4now Dec 12, 2009  Professional General Artist
mm I love this

I cried starshine into your emerald arms,
so you could become the meaningful whisper I'll never hear
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:iconseussical-love:
While I thank you very much for the compliment, I'll have you know that my dear *IrrevocableFate penned that couplet. (:
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~Reanimated4now Dec 13, 2009  Professional General Artist
fear not I has told her verrmuch teh same thing ;d
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:iconaero5mith:
This is beautifully written!
I love your play on realistic words in unrealistic situations to represent realistic instances in life! You're poetry makes my brain excited! :la:
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:iconnataliexcupcake:
This is beautiful! i love the last stanza. :love:
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